Thesis Attempt #2 (tee hee hee, Nick, if you're reading this, I said number two!)
Since I had my unfortunate incident with blogger.com last night and couldn't see Ms.MacDonell's feedback, I'm trying to pull off three new paragraphs tonight. They will not be great, and they will not be final draft because I have piles of homework and don't have time to spare. I'm having quite a bit of trouble trying to pinpoint exactly how to word my statement. It is not going well, so I'll call this my sad half-attempt:
Cultural changes occured in both the Ilunjinle tribe and the Igbo tribe, however the changes in The Lion and the Jewel were brought about by the media, while Things Fall Apart had more violent changes. Some people of the Ilunjinle tribe were converted to follow alternate ways of life because of the books published by other cultures. Propaganda was introduced throughout the tribe, causing tribal values to change. Also, an uproar went through the tribe when foreign visitors showed off their new technology. In the Igbo tribe, the intrudors brought Christianity to some of the more willing members, taking away from their true culture. Resentment built up towards the Christians, and many deaths resulted. The drastic changes taking place made several in the tribe lose touch with their true roots. Some people in the Ilunjinle tribe were fascinated by the ideas conatined in the books that were spreading around.
The different ways of life of other cultures were being introduced to people in The Lion and the Jewel. This fascinated some people, who had never heard of any other way but their own. Lakunle, the schoolteacher, was a prime example of one of those people. He discovered that women were not to be married just so they could bear his children, they were to love and be loved in return. He had decided that bride-pricing was no longer the way to go, because it did not show love, it showed women as being treated as a child-bearing housekeeper. Women should be treated as the man's equal. However, not everything was modernized yet because men still believed women had very small brains and could not think as well as they. It had been unheard of not to pay the bride-price when a wedding was to be had, but these books had made Lakunle think differently, it had opened him up to explore ways of life he had never heard of before. Books were not the only type of media being spread around the village as the magazine became famous.
A magazine was published and distributed throughout the village, which in turn caused much excitement. The ladies were in awe over Sidi, whose beauty had been published in the magazine. They forgot about their "true role" in their tribe, which was to cook and clean and raise children. They became vain over this materialistic world, and wanted more than anything to be a part of it. Sidi was the most vain. Her ego grew and she cared about nothing but her looks and her fame. She wanted to be better than Bale Baroka, so she forgets her "true female duties" and tries to work herself to the top. In the end, this fails her. Her heart is no longer in the tribal life, and she is lead down a path of misery.
I am having quite a bit of trouble writing this in so short a time. I am trying to word my thesis so it includes Ilunjinle vs Igbo, modern vs traditional, and media vs violence, but I'm finding it hard to fit all of that in one concise statement. The paragraphs were poorly done, I didn't get a change to do a good, solid outline, so I will be working on all of that.
Cultural changes occured in both the Ilunjinle tribe and the Igbo tribe, however the changes in The Lion and the Jewel were brought about by the media, while Things Fall Apart had more violent changes. Some people of the Ilunjinle tribe were converted to follow alternate ways of life because of the books published by other cultures. Propaganda was introduced throughout the tribe, causing tribal values to change. Also, an uproar went through the tribe when foreign visitors showed off their new technology. In the Igbo tribe, the intrudors brought Christianity to some of the more willing members, taking away from their true culture. Resentment built up towards the Christians, and many deaths resulted. The drastic changes taking place made several in the tribe lose touch with their true roots. Some people in the Ilunjinle tribe were fascinated by the ideas conatined in the books that were spreading around.
The different ways of life of other cultures were being introduced to people in The Lion and the Jewel. This fascinated some people, who had never heard of any other way but their own. Lakunle, the schoolteacher, was a prime example of one of those people. He discovered that women were not to be married just so they could bear his children, they were to love and be loved in return. He had decided that bride-pricing was no longer the way to go, because it did not show love, it showed women as being treated as a child-bearing housekeeper. Women should be treated as the man's equal. However, not everything was modernized yet because men still believed women had very small brains and could not think as well as they. It had been unheard of not to pay the bride-price when a wedding was to be had, but these books had made Lakunle think differently, it had opened him up to explore ways of life he had never heard of before. Books were not the only type of media being spread around the village as the magazine became famous.
A magazine was published and distributed throughout the village, which in turn caused much excitement. The ladies were in awe over Sidi, whose beauty had been published in the magazine. They forgot about their "true role" in their tribe, which was to cook and clean and raise children. They became vain over this materialistic world, and wanted more than anything to be a part of it. Sidi was the most vain. Her ego grew and she cared about nothing but her looks and her fame. She wanted to be better than Bale Baroka, so she forgets her "true female duties" and tries to work herself to the top. In the end, this fails her. Her heart is no longer in the tribal life, and she is lead down a path of misery.
I am having quite a bit of trouble writing this in so short a time. I am trying to word my thesis so it includes Ilunjinle vs Igbo, modern vs traditional, and media vs violence, but I'm finding it hard to fit all of that in one concise statement. The paragraphs were poorly done, I didn't get a change to do a good, solid outline, so I will be working on all of that.
posted by Laweag @ 5:15 PM
1 Comments:
At 12:29 PM,
Ms. MacDonell said…
Don't worry Lauren. I am only taking in a rough draft after the break. You have some very good ideas here, but I think you still need to do a little more work on organization. Make sure that each paragraph has a topic sentence. quotations and some analysis of the quotations. I think you have done most of the hard work already, that is determining the thesis and gathering the initial ideas.
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